Help me with my story please! :(?

A very well written story, great plot, and nice use of grammar; though it could use a bit more details in some places. But other than that, it's a good story, better than most I've read. As for the dialogue, they should sound a bit more tense considering their monkey's missing and one of the them just got murdered--the way you've written it, you make them sound like the death of Arthur didn't matter to them. Please keep up the good work, your story was an interesting read. ^^